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Offline ronik

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006 July - A Little Longer
« on: July 20, 2017, 11:19:01 am »
Hi everyone,
This is my first time writing here. I started playing guitar (and music generally) 2 ½ years ago, and this website has been one of my main resources for learning. My technical progress is pretty slow, but playing music brought great people into my life and more options for creativity.

This is a song I wrote a year ago. I recently decided to challenge myself to create a song recording in which I am playing all the instruments, I hope you like it, and am looking forward to feedback (feel free to make it harsh)

https://soundcloud.com/ronikay/a-little-longer-acoustic

In the track: acoustic guitar – chords; acoustic guitar – riff; bassline – played on acoustic and transposed 1 octave down; cajon drum; vocals.

Effects: normalize; noise reduction; transpose (for bassline).

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Roni

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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #1 on: July 20, 2017, 11:51:33 am »
Ho Roni, very nice I like the vibe and good solid playing and singing - good luck with your first presentation :)
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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #2 on: July 20, 2017, 12:04:12 pm »
Hi Roni

This is great. The song structure really hangs together and holds my attention all the way through. The strumming pattern goes well with the melody and fits with the story. And I love that you multitracked all the instruments. The Cakon really does give things a great rhythmic foundation.

If I may make one suggestion, the bass line seems to me a little "hot". It might be worth backing it off a bit and perhaps panning it off to one side.

Congratulations

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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #3 on: July 20, 2017, 03:39:51 pm »
Roni,

What a great song ... really loved the sounds, the singing, the rhythms ... just great.  Certainly sounds like the work of an experienced song writer/composer.

And no reason to expect "harsh" feedback.  :)

I am still very much a novice when it comes to mixing, but I would suggest the following.

When I listen to this through my headphones each track feels like it is in the same position...all sounds centre ... right in between my ears in the middle of my head.  Which results in each instrument being a bit on top of each other.  And that makes it hard to fully appreciate the nuances.

I would suggest thinking about the position of each track, either centre or panned off to the left or right.  What seems like a fairly safe/usual approach is to keep the vocal, drum and bass dead centre and pan guitar riff to right and guitar chords left (and any other instruments).  But of course one is free to be creative.

The goal is to give more space for each track to be heard more easily, as if you were hearing the performance live off a stage unplugged.

Then I had to really concentrate to hear the lyrics clearly.  It may be that after panning, the lyric comes through more clearly.  If I were mixing I'd check closely on that and if not happy then consider lowering the levels of the instruments, perhaps just the bass (as David suggested) or bass and drum.  And if still not cutting through with punch then even the two guitar tracks.

If comments from the two Davids resonate then you can have a crack at re-mixing and dropping another version into the AVOYP or Music Critique areas ... rules of the contest are such that you can't update your entry.

And must say again, I think this is a cracking song!!

Cheers
David

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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #4 on: July 20, 2017, 06:11:00 pm »
Welcome to the forum Roni.
A great introduction to your music, your progress and your songwriting.
Well done.
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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #5 on: July 20, 2017, 06:17:54 pm »
Thank you all, appreciate the kind words and the time you took to comment :) Will implement suggestions - love learning new stuff!

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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #6 on: July 20, 2017, 06:41:08 pm »
nice, a multitrack recording by 1 creative mind :)

great stuff; dare to use that voice of yours (higher, lower, louder, silent)
The groove wasn't always easy to follow. try to get that just a bit tighter and it will be easier to follow.

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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #7 on: July 20, 2017, 11:06:46 pm »
I liked it a lot, it all comes together very nicely.
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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #8 on: July 21, 2017, 03:03:37 pm »
Very nice. Loved the strumming rhythms and the added percussion.


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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #9 on: July 21, 2017, 06:42:48 pm »
Really nice! I'm very impressed, especially since you've only been playing 2.5 years. You're a natural.

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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #10 on: July 22, 2017, 03:50:55 pm »
Great work -nice rhythm to the song. A lot of passion in the singing - really liked it.

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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #11 on: July 22, 2017, 09:28:02 pm »
Really nicely done. It has a classic female singer songwriter vibe to it... Not that you sound like Sheryl Crow but not a million miles away in feel.

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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #12 on: July 23, 2017, 01:12:35 am »
Awesome stuff. Really like your song. :)

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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #13 on: July 28, 2017, 09:58:45 am »
Thanks thanks thanks  :)

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Re: 007 July - A Little Longer
« Reply #14 on: July 28, 2017, 10:54:47 am »
It's a real challenge to sing, play all instruments, and then mix it all by yourself.
You did a really good job, impressive!

 

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