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Title: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 07, 2018, 03:59:43 pm
Hi, here's my latest effort - "Stone" - needs a few tweaks, but pretty much complete.  Not a clean guitar in sight  ;D - Grateful for your feedback. Thanks!

https://soundcloud.com/steve-cardus/stone/s-qWeEb

My legs feel like stone climbing up that hill
The weight of the world on my back has really done me in

Stop the world for a second and lend me your wings
Let me fly free while this melody spins

Featherlight I clear my mind above the Karman line
Edge of space beyond cloud 9 a natural anodyne

Start the world in a second and take back your wings
Reset my polarity while this melody spins

I've got my head in the clouds.............
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: brianlarsen on November 07, 2018, 05:55:20 pm
Hey Birdman, this is your best offering yet- and that's a bigly compliment!

I may be way off track, but I'm getting a weird 'Madchester' vibe off this- all Happy Mondays/primal screaming. If you ever perform that live, give this 'Bez'-a-bell... I'll be your dancer  ;)

Not only that, but I learned what the Karman line is as well as the other meaning of anodyne.
You should be on Sesame Street! :P
Vibes coming your way \m/
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: phx1973 on November 07, 2018, 06:02:30 pm
love the sound of that electric guitar riffing, Birdman. Very well done!
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: Balamuthiah on November 07, 2018, 06:12:32 pm
Dang Birdland! Not only are you quick with songs but you definitely make a good product in that short time. You’re truly gifted! How did you do that thing at 1:04?! What’s it called? And is that a harp I hear towards the end at about 2:28? You also have a natural gift for find the right sounds and finding the space for many such right sounds. The song gave me a whole John Lennon solo vibe for some reason. Maybe it’s just me. Good one Birdland! Time for me to go to work! :)
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 07, 2018, 07:08:42 pm
Hey Birdman, this is your best offering yet- and that's a bigly compliment!

I may be way off track, but I'm getting a weird 'Madchester' vibe off this- all Happy Mondays/primal screaming. If you ever perform that live, give this 'Bez'-a-bell... I'll be your dancer  ;)

Not only that, but I learned what the Karman line is as well as the other meaning of anodyne.
You should be on Sesame Street! :P
Vibes coming your way \m/
Haha Brian, you made me chuckle! Never got the Madchester link until I gave another listen, and you're right there's a flavour in there.  I look like something off Sesame Street, so I'd fit in well ;D
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 07, 2018, 07:09:49 pm
love the sound of that electric guitar riffing, Birdman. Very well done!
Thanks for taking a listen phx!
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 07, 2018, 07:18:33 pm
Dang Birdland! Not only are you quick with songs but you definitely make a good product in that short time. You’re truly gifted! How did you do that thing at 1:04?! What’s it called? And is that a harp I hear towards the end at about 2:28? You also have a natural gift for find the right sounds and finding the space for many such right sounds. The song gave me a whole John Lennon solo vibe for some reason. Maybe it’s just me. Good one Birdland! Time for me to go to work! :)
Cheers Bala! The thing at 1:04 is the tempo track being slowed down for a second (stop the world for a second) it's in GarageBand - there's a few vids on line explaining how to do it. First time I've tried it - cool tho! There is no harp, I can only hear my squealing backing vocal  ;D I need to fix the ending if the tune it's too clunky.  I can only think the Lennon thing is my posh scouse accent  ;D - thanks man, really appreciate the feedback.
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: DavidP on November 07, 2018, 07:21:31 pm
Very polished production, b1rdland, the writing, arrangement,  mix, tones. Really creative. Fabulous original tune.
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: Balamuthiah on November 07, 2018, 09:35:11 pm
Cheers Bala! The thing at 1:04 is the tempo track being slowed down for a second (stop the world for a second) it's in GarageBand - there's a few vids on line explaining how to do it. First time I've tried it - cool tho! There is no harp, I can only hear my squealing backing vocal  ;D I need to fix the ending if the tune it's too clunky.  I can only think the Lennon thing is my posh scouse accent  ;D - thanks man, really appreciate the feedback.

Thank you on the information about slowing time! Man the thing I love about you is your ability to use these effects into your songs with such brilliance! Very Beatlesque indeed! I was debating if that was a squeal or a harp, it actually sounded like a harp really. I really wouldn't change anything from the song. But go for it if you feel like it! You might come up with something even more brilliant and there's always the old track to go back to if it doesn't work out.

Ah! Are you from Liverpool? I've been there once! It was a dream come true to do the Beatles guided tour! My sister's in Southampton still so I might come back again someday!
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 07, 2018, 09:41:15 pm
Yep I'm from Liverpool - don't live there now, but visit a lot for football, gigs and a few beers!
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: batwoman on November 07, 2018, 09:49:40 pm
b1, what a groove. Such enticing almost hypnotic, perhaps from beyond the Karman line? sounds echoing your most excellent lyrics. Love love love your lyrics. I can hear so many interpretations of this. Thanks for this. You've set my mind and spirit searching. Such is the power of your music.
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 07, 2018, 10:06:02 pm
b1, what a groove. Such enticing almost hypnotic, perhaps from beyond the Karman line? sounds echoing your most excellent lyrics. Love love love your lyrics. I can hear so many interpretations of this. Thanks for this. You've set my mind and spirit searching. Such is the power of your music.
Thank you, those are special comments!
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: CT on November 08, 2018, 04:50:44 am
That's a really tasty track!  Vibe for days and it shifts gears a few times. You can take it off of private listening, that one has legs. 8)
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 08, 2018, 11:33:32 am
That's a really tasty track!  Vibe for days and it shifts gears a few times. You can take it off of private listening, that one has legs. 8)
Thanks CT - it is now public  ;D  Appreciate you taking the time to have a listen.
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: max_mue on November 08, 2018, 12:52:58 pm
I'm out of words, it's just great & I really dig your music. Good thing you've already created so many songs, but I'm looking forward to your next one anyway :D
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: Balamuthiah on November 08, 2018, 12:58:09 pm
Thinking about it, don’t you have enough for an album yet?
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 08, 2018, 05:34:16 pm
I'm out of words, it's just great & I really dig your music. Good thing you've already created so many songs, but I'm looking forward to your next one anyway :D
Cheers Max! I dig that you dig it, thanks for listening  ;D
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 08, 2018, 05:38:50 pm
Thinking about it, don’t you have enough for an album yet?
Ha not quite Bala, I think I had 8 songs on "Things Of Importance" - I have 5 done - all posted on here apart from "Angel Heart" (my favourite song - very emotional for me to write and I'm very proud of that one), so I think I'll (hopefully) do another 3.......if I don't dry up again for a year  ::)
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: Balamuthiah on November 08, 2018, 06:00:33 pm
Ha not quite Bala, I think I had 8 songs on "Things Of Importance" - I have 5 done - all posted on here apart from "Angel Heart" (my favourite song - very emotional for me to write and I'm very proud of that one), so I think I'll (hopefully) do another 3.......if I don't dry up again for a year  ::)

Wait you have an album out already?! Did you release it?!
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 08, 2018, 06:32:35 pm
Wait you have an album out already?! Did you release it?!
I WISH! No afraid not Bala, it's just an "album" (collection of songs) on Soundcloud - mostly done in 2015/16.
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: Balamuthiah on November 08, 2018, 06:46:13 pm
Why not? I’m sorry for the thread hijack but what does it take to release these days? I wonder if there is a thread about this topic.
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 08, 2018, 06:53:17 pm
Why not? I’m sorry for the thread hijack but what does it take to release these days? I wonder if there is a thread about this topic.
Good point, not sure TBH. I'm guessing digital is the way to go, although I bet you could get a CD pressed for a price.
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: Balamuthiah on November 08, 2018, 06:59:13 pm
I’m guessing digital would be the convenient and inexpensive option. A physical form for the music we make would be awesome like Jack White would think. But initially I’d think we would naturally want to evaluate the returns. A lot goes into promotions if we went the recording studio route. But the good thing is people would buy more that way. Hmm interesting topic to have a thread on to get input from people who are doing this sort of thing. But you should definitely release your work Birdland. I’d buy for sure! :)
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 08, 2018, 07:06:35 pm
I’m guessing digital would be the convenient and inexpensive option. A physical form for the music we make would be awesome like Jack White would think. But initially I’d think we would naturally want to evaluate the returns. A lot goes into promotions if we went the recording studio route. But the good thing is people would buy more that way. Hmm interesting topic to have a thread on to get input from people who are doing this sort of thing. But you should definitely release your work Birdland. I’d buy for sure! :)
;D
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: embishop on November 09, 2018, 12:53:04 pm
What a great song and sound, music, playing, lyrics, production, loved it.

Mari
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 09, 2018, 09:16:50 pm
What a great song and sound, music, playing, lyrics, production, loved it.

Mari

Thanks Mari!  8)
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: pkboo3 on November 11, 2018, 01:52:43 pm
Good one, B1rd. Your use of words is almost or as good as Batwoman’s. You both are so articulate which I admire immensely. Great lyrics, great song. Such skill. I also had to look up Kármán line, anodyne, and what Brian said about Madchester.  Great listen!


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Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 11, 2018, 02:48:18 pm
Good one, B1rd. Your use of words is almost or as good as Batwoman’s.


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Thanks pkboo3 - Praise indeed! Appreciate you having a listen and for the great feedback.
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: Fox Cunning on November 11, 2018, 06:52:20 pm
Really cool! Professional sound, good vocals, nice riffing and nice lead guitar, awesome!
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: LBro on November 12, 2018, 06:35:48 am
B1,
Nice original!
Nice guitar work and writing to make it stand out and shine. Some good effects makes it a good headphone treat.

I am partial to originals and this one is a good one, so keep them coming.
Rock it down,
LB
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 15, 2018, 07:30:47 am
Fox and LBro, thanks for giving it a listen guys and for the great feedback!  LBro, Joining the forum has given me a renewed desire to write tunes, seeing and listening to all the great diverse stuff on here really inspires me, so I will keep listening and hopefully, creating.
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: PilgrimPod on November 16, 2018, 10:50:31 am
Joining the forum has given me a renewed desire to write tunes, seeing and listening to all the great diverse stuff on here really inspires me, so I will keep listening and hopefully, creating.
More! ;D
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: b1rdland on November 17, 2018, 10:18:13 am
More! ;D
Haha Pilgrim thanks - I have DIY jobs stacking up at home, my wife's face is telling me to put the guitar down and pick up the paint brush...... better put the guitar down for a while methinks  :-\
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: LBro on November 17, 2018, 01:29:39 pm
Haha Pilgrim thanks - I have DIY jobs stacking up at home, my wife's face is telling me to put the guitar down and pick up the paint brush...... better put the guitar down for a while methinks  :-\
Yeah and for some reason I have yet to comprehend fully, they call the wife - "The better half". I guess guys just need a project manager in their life to keep them on track or something.  Time to buy the wife a pink guitar and get it in her blood!  ;)

LB
Title: Re: Original Song - "Stone"
Post by: redrhodie on November 18, 2018, 01:52:54 pm
I like this a lot! Groovy and I dig your vocals, and background vocals. Great song. Guitar sounds great, too.

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