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Title: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: embishop on July 01, 2018, 04:33:50 pm
https://soundcloud.com/user-515453056/love-is-hard/s-cWsnW

https://soundcloud.com/user-515453056/breathless/s-gpKKB


I really need to start writing music again. Good, bad or ugly, music saves me. Having a crappy morning so I went looking through some old files to find these 2. I wrote and recorded them 10+ years ago, don’t recall exactly when. I’m on the guitars and the drum loops, and my partner Krista is on vocals. We were using Cool Edit Pro for recording, and had figured out how to import drum loops and play around with them a bit. The music isn’t perfect, but it was fun. Breathless I like because at that time I couldn’t play the music I ended up writing and playing! The bends on that one are off, I’m going to blame that it’s difficult to bend notes on an acoustic guitar. Love Is Hard I like because it was just a fun song to record, figuring out the drums a bit. I was never happy with the bridge on that one though, too forced.

Anyway, a trip down memory lane this morning.

Mari


LOVE IS HARD

V 1
Love ain't no whisper in the stillness
Ain't no gentle touch of rain
Ain't no considered steady walk
Love ain't no gentle breath of air
No please and thanks it's unprepared
Love is lightning in the dark
Baby love is hard

Chorus
I'm not the one for you
Funny that when you're the one for me
Take my passion, take my soul, take my heart
Baby love is hard

V 2
Love ain't the something that you stole away
A world of sweet and true
Love ain't the pieces of my heart
Love ain't the truth that got away
Ain't no tomorrow no today
Love is lightning in the dark
Baby love is hard

Chorus

Bridge
Show me a world of lovers talking, laughing
I'll show you a world of strangers lonely
Fill my senses my delight my wonder
And when the world breaks off and leaves me lonely
I know

Chorus


BREATHLESS

V1
Every midnight, every morning
Every hour of every day
Every breath, every touch, every kind of reason
Every word I could possibly say

Chorus
Like a river running to the ocean, I need you
Like a rainbow after the stormin, I want you
Leave me breathless

V2
Every today, every tomorrow
Every laughter and every dream
It's every prayer, it's all my life, it's heaven falling on me
When you stand so close I can barely breathe

Chorus

Bridge
Somewhere outside this love
There's a million pieces of the chatter of the world
And I don't turn my head and I don't lose my way
All I see is you

Chorus

Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: DavidP on July 01, 2018, 05:43:05 pm
Thanks for taking us with on your morning trip, Mari.

Both pretty cool, enjoyable in different ways.

May your day be progressively less crappy  :)
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: CT on July 01, 2018, 06:05:09 pm
I full-on dig Breathless. The only thing I would offer is that you loose the groove when you pause to do the run with the bends. No issues with the bends otherwise. Such a cool Melissa Etheridge vibe. 
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: Fox Cunning on July 01, 2018, 11:11:27 pm
Sorry to hear that your morning was on the crappy side. Hope the day turned for the better.
At the very least finding these old gems must have brought you a smile!

They sound pretty good, sure not perfect but fun indeed. Love the old school rocky vibe of Love is hard, and Krista has a nice voice.

I've still got a folder full of the music I did ~20 years ago (althought I lost most of it due to a HDD failure), that ain't as good trust me ;D
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: embishop on July 02, 2018, 04:14:18 am
Thanks David, glad you enjoyed them.

Thanks CT, I'll check out playing it again to see about the groove. I'll have to re-learn the song lol, but I think that's within my ability now 😃

Thanks Fox. Most of my folder of old stuff is just in written form. There was a cassette tape at one point but I doubt that exists anywhere now. However, I think I might go looking for an old binder of songs, I'm sure that's around somewhere still.
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: batwoman on July 02, 2018, 04:32:42 am
Mari what a fine lyricist you are. I particularly like the lyrics of Love is Hard. To know that you wrote these 10+ years ago makes me wonder if your style has changed and how your song writing has developed? You are so immensely talented in so many ways.

I can certainly see and feel how music is healing and cathartic for you. That's part of the power of what you do.

I always hesitate before offering a personal opinion especially when the work is original, so please take the following with a pinch of salt. I'd love to hear Love is Hard sung  slower with simpler accompaniment. I find the words rich, I need time to feel them, for the effect of them to permeate. I don't want to be hurried along to the next bar, nor do I want to listen to all the other musical threads and voices. It's a bit like something delicious to drink or eat, I want to savour the pleasure or in this case, the pain.

Thanks for sharing these gems.
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: embishop on July 02, 2018, 05:15:47 pm
Thanks for your comments, batwoman. I haven't written much in the last 10 years, so I don't think that my songwriting has developed too much! That was one of the reasons I started being structured with Justin's lessons last summer, and became an active member on the Forum. I wrote so many songs when I was young, then I just got away from it. I wanted to learn, and to write. Haven't written much this last year, but I have learned a lot.

I'm totally fine with any comments or suggestions on anything I play or write. So you make an interesting comment. With that yes I can hear a slower version of Love is Hard, a very different song for sure. When I wrote that song I had just learned the 12-bar blues style with a chunka-chunka shuffle rhythm, and I put some drum loops on, and playing that 12 bar blues I wrote the song in like 30 minutes (except for the bridge). The drums and the guitar rhythm tied together to make it a 'fun' song, notwithstanding the un-fun lyrics! I do like your idea of a slower stripped down version, but I can't promise when I'll get to actually do that!

Thanks batwoman 😃

Mari
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: DarrellW on July 02, 2018, 05:51:26 pm
Yup I agree with BW, I could enjoy that one more of an acoustic slow minor blues with different phrasing, it would definitely suit the lyrics better for me! I think that that’s the art in songwriting - matching the music in the most sympathetic way with the lyrics!
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: Barend on July 02, 2018, 06:06:10 pm
Hi Mari
I enjoyed both of these... can see why the re-listening and posting served to give your day a 'power boost'.

Best.
Barend


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Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: embishop on July 03, 2018, 02:17:26 pm
Thanks Darrell, songwriting is definitely an art! I hope to be working on some new stuff soon.

Thanks Barend, I'm glad you liked them.

Mari
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: oldhead49 on July 03, 2018, 05:39:37 pm
Hi, Mari.  Wow, these are rich.  The lyrics are outstanding and really telling a story.  Love Is Hard - definitely liked the groove you had going there.  Maybe a little more treble on guitar for my own personal taste.
Sorry to hear about  your crappy morning.  Hopefully things are getting better.
You and Krista make an awesome duo, and I'm hoping the two of you will do more soon.  Thanks for pulling these out of your archives and posting them. 
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: Sergei Vlassov on July 04, 2018, 12:37:40 am
Great to see another original music here!
Songs are really good! But the quality of the mixes... There are so many mistakes made, that I don't even know where to start :) If you interested, I can give some advice and point to some mistakes made.
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: MrBumble on July 04, 2018, 07:56:09 am
@ Sergei Vlassov

Mari made these recordings 10 years ago. From her later work we know she's got much better!

@ embishop

I've been away for a few days so I'm only catching up with this rather late.
I'm really interested to hear your early work so that we can see how it's developed. Both songs are recognizably Mari - which is a good thing. Your voice is instantly recognizable too. Thank you for sharing these with us.
Time for a "Greatest Hits" album?
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: Sergei Vlassov on July 04, 2018, 02:17:24 pm

Mari made these recordings 10 years ago. From her later work we know she's got much better!


a, ok then ) I missed this point, thank you. It is time to re-record them then ) Songs are really nice.
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: Matek on July 04, 2018, 02:59:03 pm
Mari, you seem to have a natural talent for writing lyrics, although I'm sure a lot of work and thought goes into it. They actually sound like proper songs.
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: Mike Sebastian P on July 04, 2018, 03:27:50 pm
Hello Mari! Beautiful songs from your duo,
guitar and vocals sound great!

Mike
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: embishop on July 04, 2018, 03:50:01 pm
Sergei, thanks for the comments, I'm always happy to learn from others. For sure I have lots to learn about recording still, but yes as MrBumble noted these are old recordings. I haven't been up to much playing lately so I decided to go digging through some old files.

Mr Bumble, thanks for listening and for your comments. Don't we all have an album ambition in our soul?? 😃

And thanks Matek. 'Proper songs' 😃 My songwriting focus used to be on the lyrics, and mostly just strumming along. When I started getting interested in becoming a better guitar player I focused less on writing. I'm mostly thinking these days lol, but I think I'm headed back to work on being a songwriter.

And thanks Mike, I'm glad I have someone to play with!

Thanks everybody

Mari
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: kontenda on July 07, 2018, 05:14:07 am
Love is Hard
This is a great rocking song - nice work on the drums. Really well sung by your partner. The lyrics are fantastic. I don't think it needed that extra vocal effect during the bridge. Overall I really enjoyed it - a song to dance to. Well done.

Breathless
Another good song Mari - good lyrics, nice work on the guitar and well sung. I liked the guitar transition to the bridge.
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: redrhodie on July 08, 2018, 10:37:18 pm
Very cool! I don't know how I missed this thread. You guys sound awesome! Totally different vibe from each song, but both are really well written, played and sung. I like both of them.

Lynn

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Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: embishop on July 11, 2018, 01:32:43 am
Thanks kontenda, pulling out these old songs was kind of fun 😃

Thanks Lynn, your prolific writing inspires me, I hope I can find some new songs now 😃

Mari
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: pkboo3 on July 11, 2018, 08:43:19 pm
I enjoyed them both. Reading what the others have said, I would also love a redo just to hear how you would change it up. And the improvements you would make. And of course, for me, for now, acoustic is my preference.


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Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: embishop on July 14, 2018, 02:58:48 pm
Thanks Pam, I'm glad you enjoyed them. I've been thinking about re-working some other old songs that I don't have recordings of, so eventually these ones too. And some new ones 😃
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: crocodile1 on July 15, 2018, 08:33:01 pm
Well done  songs, both of them!
my hat's off to persons who can write lyrics and make their own music!
                Leo
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: embishop on July 16, 2018, 01:14:17 pm
Thanks Leo  :)
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: LBro on July 20, 2018, 01:05:44 pm
Hi Mari,
Wow you need to get back into this groove! For sure!
Liked Love is Hard and the vibe you got going there. Very nice sounding and writing indeed.

Breathless - To me your other song is more flowing and has a catchy vibe. Not to say this is not good, just I like the other effort better.

Nice vocal work on both.... Mixing and such could use a bit of work but that was a long time back and things were not as good then equipment/plug wise.

Great job and nice to hear originals coming up in the forum. Do get back into them and crank out the good stuff.

LB
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: Balamuthiah on July 20, 2018, 04:59:41 pm
Just heard both the songs. Amazing really! Wonderful vocals and good rhythm guitar playing. And not to forget great songwriting. Like you said just those bends were off but I’m sure you could do it better now. In all I loved them both for being good in their own way.
Title: Re: 2 Originals: Love is Hard, and Breathless
Post by: embishop on July 21, 2018, 07:00:15 pm
Thanks LBro. I started out many years ago in my guitar journey wanting to be a songwriter most of all, but these days my first goal is to be a better guitar player. However, improving my guitar skills should also improve my songwriting skills, so that's the plan now. The only one I'm currently working on is not a rocker, but I do have a nice new Gretsch waiting to write one with me! 😃

Thanks Balamuthiah. Yes hopefully I could do better now, on both songs. That's my intent anyway, to get better!!

Mari